The Dog Following You Home - Response to Richard Tyler's Poem

I liked this poem a lot, but there was one thing that drove me crazy. The line breaks! Sometimes they were perfect, this stanza for instance, 

         I know better and

         I know best. For me

         that time is real. The truth

         is fossilized in the bedrock

         of my being

And sometimes they were a little confusing to me, like when a word would be left dangling at the end of a line. Sometimes it made sense there, like in the example above how "For me" works at the end of the previous line as well as the beginnning of the next. Unfortunately, sometimes it did not make sense: "I tuck it away, stuff / it out of sight. Again..." I often do the same thing in my poetry because it seems dramatic and poetic but it's often just confusing and makes it harder to read. This poem had some really awesome metaphors. The comparison of the story they tell as proof of past happiness to evidence for the trial was cool. Using the word proof here was a good choice. Another image and metaphor I liked was the image of the masked killer as a persistent dog following you home, something you can't shake. And in the final lines I thought the image of the ink from the picture flowing through his hands onto paper was really effective and a great ending.